Thread: Left 4 Dead:Outbreak Part I

My atempt at a L4D story.

Part I
By MegaanthraxSlaylica

A group of survivors dragged themselves to the abandoned street.They were exhausted and had been going on for days.They were low on ammo and were hoping that another vicious horde would not ambush them.
If things weren't bad enough rain pelted them and there destroyed clothes."Wait" said Ronald.Ronald was a young man who is a qualified doctor with short brown hair and a pump-action shotgun.The four of them stopped in their tracks as they seen a man who was standing in the darkness.The young woman with a Uzi submachine gun sneaked up to the man."Hello?" said Jane.She is a Africian american with black hair and a Dawn of the Dead t-shirt.The man turned around and screamed the four survivors blew him apart with there pounding weapons."YEAH!!!" said a teenager.Otto was his name and metal is his game.He has curly black hair and a t-shirt with the name SLAYER printed on his shirt and shorts down to the knees.He was a identical twin to The Simpsons's Otto.Then there was Harry.A old horror film actor.While working on the TV zombie show he had to dress up as a zombie.So he is wearing a basic zombie suit.His head was the only exposed bit of his body.He was a balding man with grey hair."Good job it ws only one". said Otto.Otto leaned on a flashing car.The other three all shouted "NO!!!".Out of every crack in the buildings zombies came sprinting at them.The streets were flooded with the Horde.
Trying to fight off the horde was not easy even if you did have lots of ammo,nevermind having only three clips at the least.The ran for refuge into a small store.They barricaded the windows and tryed to hold off the remaining undead.Suddenly a huge roar came out of nowhere."TANK!!!".The tank burst through the poor barricade and tryed to pummel Jane.
Hunters crawled in and tryed to pounce Otto.They ran into a small cuboard and locked the door."We are Left for Dead!!"said Ronald panting.
(To be countinued)
Part II coming soon.
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what do you mean?

Post has been edited due to a system error that resulted in a double post.

WALL OF TEXT

A piece of writing that does not use proper grammar and generally looks like a giant essay with 20 to 400 sentences without using paragraphs or any bit of spacing at all.

John writes: i am good in english, i try my best in doing what i do what i think is best and that im pretty intelligent when it comes to doing this. to be honest its not that hard but i find it easier for me to just write it like this, and i hope it can be easy for people to read this too. i like writing about stuff. i like chicken. i like food. i like eating. eating is great. blah blah blah blah blah. i am awesome. i am cool. i believe im awesome and cool. isnt that awesome and cool??


Courtesy of urban dictionary.

Also,ow my eyes.

I have no idea what your talking about?

Originally Posted by megaanthraxslaylica

I have no idea what your talking about?

There is absolutely no correct punctuation aside from the use of periods at the ends of sentences, and quotation marks. Furthermore, there is no spacing. I would give you my opinion on the story and such, but I can't stand reading such a mess for more than 3 sentences. I'm not trying to be an asshole. this is just unreadable.